panic at the rodeo

I read this the first time through and had to rethink my thoughts... this is meant to be sang right? a slow rock or soft pop would be my choice ...

I really like this piece. I love how you put a spin on the whole masked society kind of idea. "Blinded" A hero, I am not. People may look to ...

I like this poem... it's very dark, but yes it gets a little too cliche in parts... if you can find a way to put a new spin on it ...

I like this one... you have a beautiful idea here... you need more meat to it... it's flow is okay, but it's kinda awkward to read... you're a little jerky, ...

nice one! I like your questioning Jesus. Asking him what it was like... Maybe you could use a few LESS questions, but it really makes you reflect! Lines I like: ...

Ayu! I love this song!! It's such a sorrowful sweet song! Sometime you must sing it to me! (:D) I think emo rock is a good genre for it... OR ...

I like the imagery! I agree with the suggestions above. Only thing is I personally am keen on your fear-hungry line. It gives the poem a sort of strange but ...

Wow... Silverware being compared to love is a new one for me... I thought it was kind of morbidly beautiful! It was short, but very to the point... It took ...

I like the idea of the poem, but there is something a little akward about the lines that makes it a two read poem, where you don't really get the ...

I liked the voice of your poem. It had that desperate feeling in the speaker's words... made me feel like he was really missing that girl... the grammar needs a ...

That was an intense poem! It was so straight to the point I was a little appalled... I like the talk about the African countries... It seems like it's a ...